2 - Experiment at the beach
In cold war’s warm wash, Yuan Yen airing thoughts in the Laundromat sorts newly clean pillow cases jeans and sundry tees while linens and towels on awning rafters air dry-- adds notes in...
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That's the second poem of yours I've read today with a roundelay in it. Sent me to Turco."cold war" and "yen" in the first line led be to expect something I don't find.... Oh, now I see; I was...
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to receipts on roundelays the family checks everyday buttoning, zipping and collecting coins Should that be roundelays on receipts? The last four lines go a bit untethered (whozit whatsit) for me....
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I like it. Need to think about it and reread it a bit more. I like the shape too. Need to look up roundelay, I think. Sorry to be brief. I'm trying to comment while on the road.
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